Friday, 18 August 2017

Game of Awesome creative writing

Once upon a time in a galaxy far, far away there was a little boy named Tom, Tom and his dad went to a Hot-dog eating competition. The winner and his partner would get to do their victory dance on the royal stage. Tom and his dad really wanted to win so they entered in the competition, was at night so Tom and his dad went back home to change into their new hot-dog T-shirts.  

When Tom and his dad got changed into their new hot-dog T-shirts they went back to the competition. Everyone who entered in the competition got HUGE!! bowls of hot-dogs The person who finished their bowl of hot-dogs would win. "Ready Set GO!!" everyone started eating their hot-dogs. Tom and his dad were eating their hot dogs as fast as they could they stuffed their mouth with so much hot-dogs. They were nearly finished but this other person was gonna beat them so Tom cheated.

He hid some of his hot-dogs under the table and stuffed some in his t-shirt then he yelled "Were Finished We Win" so they went to the royal stage and started doing their victory dance. But someone found hot-dogs under his table and some fell out of his t-shirt. "He cheated" yelled everyone, Tom got
sad and started to do a sad dance the sad dance was dancing like his DAD.


1 comment:

  1. Hi Ilaisaane, I really like how you have started your story with once upon a time and really thought about who your characters are and what they are doing in the story.

    Starting your story off with once upon a time made me think of a traditional fairy tale story. Your story has many twists and turns that are unexpected and it ends with a moral at the end of the story.

    What happens after the sad dance? Are they allowed to enter hot do competitions in the future?

    Miss Parrant