So today I visited the misty graveyard to see my grandpa, I frantically ran across the yard to see my grandpa when my mum shouted "Don't run it's raining and you might slip", My cheeks turned crimson because my mum just embarrassed me in front of my own family.
Hi Saane, I really enjoyed this quick write; I liked the idea that you had and the way that you used the new vocabulary. I really enjoyed how clearly you wrote - your audience could easily understand what you were describing!
ReplyDeleteHi Saane,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Lini and I am a year 8 at St Pius X Catholic School I really love the vocabulary you used for your writing other than that keep up the good work.
Lini
Hi Saane! This is a really great short story, Next time you could write a little bit more !
ReplyDeleteKeep it up ~ Joey